576 word story

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Basically like the 3 word story, but you have to add 576 words per post. BUT WAIT! You also have to copy and paste everyone's post before you. Should be fun.

Please don't spam this thread.

I'll start...


About forty miles north of Atlanta in rapidly growing Forsyth County is a pretty covered bridge known as Poole's Mill Bridge. It's one of the few covered bridges left in Georgia - or anywhere, for that matter. At one time the sagging old bridge was in such bad shape that it about fell into the creek below. But the county built a nearby park and restored the covered bridge to its original state. So now, as in years past, the bridge is a really nice spot to have a family picnic, or a romantic afternoon with your sweetheart, or just to stop by to enjoy a nice wade in the creek.

That's exactly what one young family did on a bright summer day back in the 1930s. At that time there was a grist mill operating near the bridge, which is how Poole's Mill got its name. The mill was first built in the early 1800s by a Cherokee named George Welch. But he was tragically forced out of Georgia by the government and sent out west along the notorious Trail of Tears. Even though another family took over the grist mill and ran it successfully for years, some say the area was forever cursed by the wrong done to Mr. Welch.

The young family I mentioned earlier included a Daddy, a Mama and their nine-year- old daughter. They were travelling through the area when they saw the pretty bridge and thought they'd stop for a picnic just upstream from the mill. Mama and Daddy spread a blanket on a tiny hill while their daughter ran down to the creek.

"Watch yourself down there!" yelled Mama after her daughter.

But the young girl didn't pay her any mind. It was hot as the devil's kitchen, and that cool water sure looked tempting. So the young girl kicked off her shoes and socks, hiked up her dress and jumped into that cool water.

What nobody knew that day was that recent rains had made the creek deeper and more treacherous than it seemed. In no time, the current suddenly swept the young girl away. Mama and Daddy heard her screams and ran down to the creek bank. Then they gazed in horror at what lay ahead.

Their daughter was floating downstream toward the grist mill.

Her daddy dove into the water and frantically swam after her. He was a strong swimmer, and with the help of the current he inched closer and closer to his screaming daughter. But she was being sucked toward the large water wheel that creaked and groaned in the rushing water like some wounded monster.

"Hold on sweetheart!" screamed Daddy, his mouth filling with the rushing water.

Daddy lunged for the big blue bow on the back of his daughter's dress, his fingertips mere inches from her. Then with one final, blood curdling scream, his daughter was sucked under the water wheel. The mill creaked to a halt, and Daddy knew with sickening certainty that his daughter was wedged under the wheel.

By this time the mill workers had heard her screams. They dove into the water to help save her. But by the time they pried her from the slimy wooden teeth of the water wheel, it was too late. The pretty young girl had drowned, her face as blue as the bow on her dress.

The story spread like wildfire through the community. Devastated, the young couple left the state with ...
 

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About forty miles north of Atlanta in rapidly growing Forsyth County is a pretty covered bridge known as Poole's Mill Bridge. It's one of the few covered bridges left in Georgia - or anywhere, for that matter. At one time the sagging old bridge was in such bad shape that it about fell into the creek below. But the county built a nearby park and restored the covered bridge to its original state. So now, as in years past, the bridge is a really nice spot to have a family picnic, or a romantic afternoon with your sweetheart, or just to stop by to enjoy a nice wade in the creek.

That's exactly what one young family did on a bright summer day back in the 1930s. At that time there was a grist mill operating near the bridge, which is how Poole's Mill got its name. The mill was first built in the early 1800s by a Cherokee named George Welch. But he was tragically forced out of Georgia by the government and sent out west along the notorious Trail of Tears. Even though another family took over the grist mill and ran it successfully for years, some say the area was forever cursed by the wrong done to Mr. Welch.

The young family I mentioned earlier included a Daddy, a Mama and their nine-year- old daughter. They were travelling through the area when they saw the pretty bridge and thought they'd stop for a picnic just upstream from the mill. Mama and Daddy spread a blanket on a tiny hill while their daughter ran down to the creek.

"Watch yourself down there!" yelled Mama after her daughter.

But the young girl didn't pay her any mind. It was hot as the devil's kitchen, and that cool water sure looked tempting. So the young girl kicked off her shoes and socks, hiked up her dress and jumped into that cool water.

What nobody knew that day was that recent rains had made the creek deeper and more treacherous than it seemed. In no time, the current suddenly swept the young girl away. Mama and Daddy heard her screams and ran down to the creek bank. Then they gazed in horror at what lay ahead.

Their daughter was floating downstream toward the grist mill.

Her daddy dove into the water and frantically swam after her. He was a strong swimmer, and with the help of the current he inched closer and closer to his screaming daughter. But she was being sucked toward the large water wheel that creaked and groaned in the rushing water like some wounded monster.

"Hold on sweetheart!" screamed Daddy, his mouth filling with the rushing water.

Daddy lunged for the big blue bow on the back of his daughter's dress, his fingertips mere inches from her. Then with one final, blood curdling scream, his daughter was sucked under the water wheel. The mill creaked to a halt, and Daddy knew with sickening certainty that his daughter was wedged under the wheel.

By this time the mill workers had heard her screams. They dove into the water to help save her. But by the time they pried her from the slimy wooden teeth of the water wheel, it was too late. The pretty young girl had drowned, her face as blue as the bow on her dress.

The story spread like wildfire through the community. Devastated, the young couple left the state with ...

nothing. Later that day Atomicide made a post about the story on LOMCN to try and raise support for the family so that they could get on with their new lives. The post was met in general agreement by most people except one ******* called "colonel" who was entirely against the proposal from the second it was posted.

Most people couldn't understand why "colonel" was such a moron, many attributed it to the fact he was abused as a child, something that colonel strongly denied, until Atomicide stated that it was unlikely. The second Atomicide stated that "colonel" wasn't abused the stories of years of abuse came flooding out.

At this point Atomicide recommended colonel should live a long and fulfilling life with hundreds of acheivements and trophies to prove he could beat the "abuse" colonel hung himself the next day and smeared **** all over his own face shortly beforehand to prove to people he would never, and could never acheive anything.

He was buried and it was a very cheap funeral.